"I felt a profound sense of ennui towards it all. That is to say: I was bored, but in a way which is only strictly possible when one is on the continent."
The well-off uninterested female protag in a desirable location/vacation is a self-indulgent and boring pastiche. Our above it at protag takes valium and a cocktail or other drugs? Riveting information, she is so cool and interesting. Bouncing from story to the historical theme every other chapter as if you trained an AI on commercial fiction slop, insulting the readers intelligence in the process because you think they will not be interested in the story otherwise. "Madrid. That was it. I was in Madrid." Single sentence at the end as if this was supposed to a bombshell of information. Why should I or the reader fucking care when you spent the first two paragraphs describing stereotypical features of European cities that make them indistinguishable from one another? If there is nothing that distinguishes Madrid it is inconsequential that to anyone reading that she is there. Oh no the Indian guy died in a train accident. Maybe he was taking a selfie.
Terrible writing
I shall pass your critique on to Florid. But could you be more precise?
The well-off uninterested female protag in a desirable location/vacation is a self-indulgent and boring pastiche. Our above it at protag takes valium and a cocktail or other drugs? Riveting information, she is so cool and interesting. Bouncing from story to the historical theme every other chapter as if you trained an AI on commercial fiction slop, insulting the readers intelligence in the process because you think they will not be interested in the story otherwise. "Madrid. That was it. I was in Madrid." Single sentence at the end as if this was supposed to a bombshell of information. Why should I or the reader fucking care when you spent the first two paragraphs describing stereotypical features of European cities that make them indistinguishable from one another? If there is nothing that distinguishes Madrid it is inconsequential that to anyone reading that she is there. Oh no the Indian guy died in a train accident. Maybe he was taking a selfie.